My heart says there is no way.
Look at the stranger
Who is that old woman there?
It is you it says back.
When did I get old?
I must have not been looking.
Where are all the years?
Look at me in the mirror.
I see myself now.
I finally found myself.
This is my first humble attempt at haiku poetry. It must:
magpietales.blogspot.com.au/be either 5-7-5 syllables each or 7-5-7. This is an entry for a contest based on the picture above.
I like the overall thoughts expressed here, but can't help wondering whether mixing the 5-7-5 with the 7-5-7 count (which I've not seen suggested as an alternative before , only a 3-5-3) breaks the rhythm when read aloud?
ReplyDeleteI wonder whether the first and third stanzas could be made to match - perhaps like so?
Look at her in the mirror.
My heart says there is no way
she has aged that much.
and for the last:-
Now my reflection
looks at me from the mirror.
Finally I'm found.
What do you think? Hope you don't mind my 'playing' with your words. *smiles*
Oops! Got that first line wrong! Too many syllables again - maybe 'Look in her mirror'? :)
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